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Re: A Random Poem...

Post by hobbit_of_narnia » Tue Jan 27, 2015 4:12 am

:) Thanks, Gypse!
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Re: A Random Poem...

Post by jesusgirl4ever » Tue Jan 27, 2015 11:26 am

Good job, Hobbit!
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Re: A Random Poem...

Post by Ariel.of.Narnia » Wed Jan 28, 2015 2:10 am

That's it. Between you and Elanor, I should just quit pretending to write pseudo-poetry. :P Excellently done, hobbit!
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Re: A Random Poem...

Post by hobbit_of_narnia » Wed Feb 25, 2015 9:14 pm

Please don't ever stop writing poetry, Ariel! I love your poems!

The desktop changed again and now it's this:
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And thus was this poem inspired...

In the rocks close by the falls
Among the moss a village clings.
And upwards to a castle crawls
The road used by the Widdle kings.

The windows glow like molten gold.
No lights the Widdles need at night,
For since they came, the legends told,
They shine like lamps with yellow light.

The Barking Dragon, brown as brown,
Comes rasping from his grimy den
And cleans himself while looking down
Upon the village in the fen.

Upon occasion he will slide
Down slippery stones, then scrape the ground
To frighten Widdle-folk outside,
And Widdle-warriors come around.

The Barker’s cat-eyes gleam and spark,
His twisted hand gropes left and right,
His talons sweep—a knight goes dark.
The Barker’s claws have snatched his light.

The Widdle king comes out in ire,
He wields a flaming golden staff.
The Dragon who now too has fire
Holds out his hand with grating laugh.

Then, quick as quick, he turns his back
And threads a path back to his hole,
He bounds from crack to sharp-edged crack,
His right hand clutching what he stole.

The Widdles shout; he heeds them not.
The fire is what gives him breath.
And so the battle that was fought
Gives one his life, the other death.


In case it wasn't clear, my theory was that the Barking Dragon needs the Widdle-fire to stay alive and therefore needs to kill a Widdle in order to get its light on its claws.
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Re: A Random Poem...

Post by narniac101 » Wed Feb 25, 2015 9:29 pm

Wooooooooooooow, Hobbit! I like when your desktop changes..... :mrgreen:
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Re: A Random Poem...

Post by jesusgirl4ever » Wed Feb 25, 2015 9:31 pm

Very cool!
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Re: A Random Poem...

Post by hobbit_of_narnia » Thu Feb 26, 2015 2:15 am

@ Nan: :lol:
@ Jaygee: Thanks!
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Re: A Random Poem...

Post by Ariel.of.Narnia » Fri Feb 27, 2015 4:05 am

(@hobbit: :P Well, thanks. :) )

That's one weird (not necessarily in a bad way) desktop image, but the poem makes it super-cool. And yes, I followed what you meant about the Barking Dragon and the Widdle-fire. :)
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Re: A Random Poem...

Post by gypsevedius » Fri Feb 27, 2015 6:02 am

Wow, Hobbit! I /finally/ got around to reading this! This is great! Someone needs to change your desktop background picture more often! Because seriously, I love your poems! And this is SO inspiring to me! I LOVE writing poetry... Ergh, I'm gonna go write a poem now. :P
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Re: A Random Poem...

Post by always narnian » Fri Feb 27, 2015 7:18 am

Wow, both are incredible works. Nicely done, Hobbit.

I love writing poems, but I'm afraid that lots of time it's really work for me, for I do not have a natural knack for rhymes.
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