Lily's NAPO 2018

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Re: Lily's NAPO 2018

Post by hobbit_of_narnia » Sat Apr 28, 2018 5:36 pm

Haha, I dunno. Maybe. :P

Ooh, these are both amazing! I have to say that you really did incredibly with your word choices in "Bookworms". :o
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Re: Lily's NAPO 2018

Post by Lily of Archenland » Sat Apr 28, 2018 10:17 pm

...Really? I am glad, then! :D I was worried one of two of the rhymes might have been reaching a little hard! :P
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broken thoughts
4/28/2018
Stumbling words suddenly
Gumming up the works,
I I can’t I don’t
I need -
Speak slower speak careful
I’m sorry it’s only
My mind’s half-asleep,
My heart’s half-awake,
No logic to run on
So many decisions.
A simple decision.
Do you want me?
Do you want help?
Where should I meet you?
Turns to mistrust turns to family turns to I am free but my wheels are not,
Turns to where can we buy privacy,
Turns to is it safe here at home.
Turns to I can’t drive and I don’t work
And professional confidentiality
Is less confidential if the neighborhood hears -
Besides the house is a mess so I’m not allowed guests -
And I haven’t gathered courage yet
To tell my parents what strangers are learning.
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Re: Lily's NAPO 2018

Post by Ariel.of.Narnia » Thu May 03, 2018 2:06 am

Sorry, I fell behind!
Absolutely love “Like seeds, like soil, like stars”!
"Behind the Glass" actually made me think of Owl City. Something in the phrasing and the almost-vague meaning behind the curious imagery.
And being a bookworm myself, definitely connect with "Bookworms". :D

"And I haven’t gathered courage yet
To tell my parents what strangers are learning."
Oof. Yeah, I've felt that before.
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Re: Lily's NAPO 2018

Post by Lily of Archenland » Mon May 07, 2018 7:58 pm

Oh, that's alright! It's good to hear back from you, even if belatedly!

...Owl City, really? Well, I'll take the compliment, although the mood and rhythm felt quite different to me... perhaps if we're talking more Plant Life than Strawberry Avalanche. ;)

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Re: Lily's NAPO 2018

Post by Ariel.of.Narnia » Tue May 08, 2018 6:10 am

I wasn't thinking of any Owl City songs in particular. The style of imagery just reminded me of his. :)
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Re: Lily's NAPO 2018

Post by Lily of Archenland » Tue May 08, 2018 2:03 pm

Kind of what I meant was... Among his more vague fantastical songs, I see two sorts of imagery. Some songs are a big grand whimsy, sort of a return to childhood or daydream-made-real. Some songs are quite morose in spite of upbeat musical style - seemingly dealing with danger, depression, feelings about death, fear of being crushed by the world, in the midst of a sea of metaphor - perhaps with notes of the world is terrible but I'm still hanging on. (And some songs really aren't vague at all and thus don't count for the analogy.) But. My first thought with Owl City tends to be the grand daydream, the whimsy-songs, and I was initially confused at the analogy until I remembered his vaguery can also be used on sadder themes.

...Heh. Overthinking much?
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Re: Lily's NAPO 2018

Post by Swanwhite » Tue May 08, 2018 11:50 pm

Bravo Lily! Spectacular stuff. That first line of Behind the Glass is really something. The image of breaking the distorting mirrors is incredibly satisfying. Within the mist and a moment are really neat too. I like how they lead into each other. Definitely makes me think of Shasta whether that was your intention or not. The book worm that grows up into a book dragon is delightful :)
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Re: Lily's NAPO 2018

Post by Lily of Archenland » Wed May 09, 2018 4:28 am

Thank you!
I'm quite Glad that the "Behind the Glass" opening clicked for you. :)
Within the mist and a moment... I wasn't mainly thinking of Shasta, but I can't deny that was one on the images in my mind. ;)
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Re: Lily's NAPO 2018

Post by Ariel.of.Narnia » Mon May 21, 2018 6:40 pm

Ahh, I get what you were getting at with the Owl City imagery now. Yes, he definitely has more than the one type and your imagery harkens more to one type than another. :D
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Re: Lily's NAPO 2018

Post by Benisse » Sat May 26, 2018 9:10 am

Thanks so much for sharing! Is NAPO only once a year? Where can I find more information about it?
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